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=Exposition/Inciting Incident=

"Beeeep" the sound of my alarm clock woke me up. It was beautiful sunny Saturday. I got up and ran to my bright and sun filled family room. It was almost 8:00. I had just remembered that I was going to go to the competitive basketball game at my school where they were going to raffle off tickets to a Yankee game. They even give you a ride to and from the game in a fancy and long limo with the smell of pizza filling the car. "Get ready", my mom said, "We have to go to the game". "Alright, I'm coming". We were going to meet my two friends Sam and Jack at the game. I've known them since kindergarden. About a week ago I saw the advertisement for the raffle before Jack, Sam and I even new about it. Afterwards, my mom said go for it because an idea is a vehicle. As I rushed out the front I could smell the wet grass and the birds chirping. By the time we got into of the car it was allready 9:00. We got in the car and drove away. i cuoldn't wait to get there. We got there faster than a speeding bullet! As I walked in I was greeted by Sam and Jack. "Hey Joe, are you thinking about the game to? "Ya, all day", I answered. We ran right over to the raffle stand . We decided to split the ticket."$10.00 per ticket" ,the old man shouted in a wispy crackly voice. "I'll pay $4.00", I added. "Are you sure?" Jack asked. "Yes, but that means that I definitely get a ticket." "Fine", they both said.

WERE YOU EXCITED ABOUT GOING TO THE GAME? WHAT TIME DID YOU HAVE TO LEAVE THE HOUSE BY? WHAT DID YOU DO DURING THE DAY? CAN YOU EXPLAIN WHAT YOU WOULD HAVE DONE IF YOU WON THE TICKETS. WHAT ELSE CAN YOU DESCRIBE? SETTING? CAN YOU ADD MORE DIALOGUE?

=Rising Action=

The line was not to big to get the raffle tickets. "Here", Sam and Jack said while they handed the man the money. Afterwards, the man said thank you a handed me the raffle ticket. It was a bright yellow cardboard ticket. "So, will see if we win after the game", I said. I put the ticket in my pocket and got a seat in the bleachers wich was as clean as my moms car. "The gym is huge", Sam said since he went to Holy Family, the chathlic school. "Well it has to be to fit this many people. The refery through the ball up and the game started. Sam read "The Game of Basketball" the whole time. "Its bible of basketball" Sam announced. The buzzer said the game was over. It was a close game, 56 to 57. Ridgedale won. It was finally time for the raffle. We were so excited. The man stood up and said the four numbers. "The numbers are 3,8,1,and 6. "We won, we won", we shouted. I went up and showed the old man our ticket. "We have a winner", he said and handed me the two Yankee game tickets. I ran back to our seats and showed everyone the two tickets. The seats were right above the big Yankee dougout in the historic Yankee stadium with the crowds cheering. "Yes" exclaimed Sam and Jack. "Well whose going to go with me?", I asked. "We could have a competition." Jack added "Ya, like a Yankee trivia game.""Who ever wins will go." "Lets have it right now", I said. I gave the first question. "How many world series games did the Yankees win". Sam said 26 and Jack didn't know. The next question was which yankee catcher died in a plane crash. Sam got the right answere. Then I said the last question. Jack had the correct answere. "We have to have an extra question." "Who was the last player on the Yankees to get into the hall of fame?" I announced. "Goose Collins" Sam anserd. He had beat Jack. Jack was so mad I thought steam would come out of his ears. He then ran out of the gym.

HOW DID YOU GET TO THE GAME? TELL ABOUT THE RIDE THERE. DID YOU HAVE TO WAIT ON A LINE TO BUY THE TICKETS? TELL WHAT THE SETTING LOOKED LIKE. CFAN YOU GIVE SOME ACTION THAT OCCURRED IN THE GAME. WHAT WERE YOUR EMOTIONS AS YOU WAITED FOR THE READING OF THE RAFFLE TICKETS?

=Climax=

Sam looked at me and said, “I feel bad, but he doesn’t have to act like that.” My mom and I took Sam home. “So tomorrow is the big day”, my mom said. When we got to my house I told my dad what happened. He laughed and said “That’s what happens when you listen to me.” Afterwards that night I had trouble going to sleep. I could picture the stadium and the players on the field. I could also hear the ball hit the bat and the crowds saying “LET’S GO YANKEES.” I finally went to sleep at around 12:00. I dreamed about the game. My dream was that the Yankees won by 25 points. When I woke up I was in a daze. Then when I remembered the game I jumped right up, got dressed and woke up my parents. They got up and made breakfast. “Sam will be hear soon” my mom said. “Ok, I’m ready”, I answered. I had my mom’s delicious eggs and a bagel. I ate fast. When Sam pulled up my drive way. I got my coat on and ran outside. He came out of his car with a big smile on his face. We went inside and waited for the limo. Then we saw a long stretch limo with the Yankee logo on it come down my street. “There’s our ride”, Sam yelled. “Ya, there it is” Both of us ran outside. The driver got out and opened the door for us. He pored a glass of rootbeer for both of us and gave us a juicy, cheesy, and steamy Philly cheese steak. He put “Meet the Fockers” in for us to watch. The limmo ride was lots of fun. We arrived at the stadium shortly. it was a perfect day for baseball, no clouds and about 80 degrese out. The stadium looked like the moon campared to the people standing next to it. We didn’t have to wait in any lines, they just let us in. Sam and I went strait our seats. We were so close we could see the face on Dereck Jeter. When A-Rod came out Sam was speechless. “Cat got your tongue” I said. He just looked at me. Then we got up and went to get some delicius snacks. We stopped at Nathen’s. I got a huge stadium sized hotdog and a soda. He got a cheeseburger and fries with a soda. We then got back to our seats and watched the players warm up. When the game started we saw the Yankees take the field. Seeing Andy Pettit warm up was amazing. The Yankees didn’t give up a run that inning. "Clack", Johnny Damon hit a home run in the secound inning. Pettit struck three batters in a row. Then Pulhos came up to bat. “It’s a deep fly ball, and caught by Bobby Abreu. The Cardinals scored tying the game up in the fourth inning. Jeter made an outstanding play to end the inning. Jaba the Hut came out to replace Pettit. It was so cool watching Jaba pitching. His fast ball looked like it went one hundred miles per hour.Jaba retired three in a row to end the fifth. It was the sixth, game tied, runners on first and third, and Melky Cabrera up to pat. If Melky gets a single, double, or triple we would be up with Revera to close the game. He hits a line drive to the outfield and Giambi scores. Melky then gets out steeling to go to the top of the sixth. “Revera strikes them out. "YANKEES WIN, YANKEES WIN”, the announcer shouted.

YOU BEGIN MANY SENTENCES WITH "I." TRY STARTING THEM WITH A DIFFERENT LETTER OF THE ALPHABET. WHAT DID THE STADIUM LOOK LIKE AS YOU WERE WALKING TO YOUR SEATS. DID YOU HAVE TO WAIT ON LINE FOR SNACKS? CAN YOU EXPLAIN HOW YOU FELT DURING THE INNINGS OF THE GAME WHEN THE YANKEES OR CARDINALS WERE INTHE LEAD. REMEMBER "SHOW NOT TELL" SENTENCES.

=Falling Action=

Sam and I jumped up out of our seats. "We won" I shouted. "Ya, we did, and its all because of Revera." Everyone in the stadium was up and shouting. When I looked around the stadium it looked like a sea of Yankee fans. We were over our heads about the win. we didn't dawdle because to aviod getting pushed and shoved on the way out, we had to go now. It was about three o'clock when we got out of the stadium. Our driver was waiting for us right outside with a big, steamy, hot, and cheesy Italian pizza. "A tribute to you from the Yankees", he told us. We got in the limmo and he handed us the pizza. We watched the rest of "Meet the Fockers". On the highway we waved our small Yankee out the window. Flap, flap, flap went the flags as they twisted and turned with the wind. When we got to my street our parents were waiting out side on my front yard. "The Yankees won" we told them excitedly. "We know." "We were watching the game on TV." We all sat down on the benches in my front yard. "So, did you have fun?", my mom asked. "Yes, lots of fun." "We had amzing seats." "So, did you expend all of the money?" my dad asked. "Yes, all of it", I said sarcastecly. We talked a little more and then Sam had to go home. This was a fun day.

DID EVERYONE WALK BACK INTO YOUR HOUSE? WHAT DID YOU SPEND YOUR MONEY ON? WHAT WAS YOUR FAVORITE PART OF THE DAY. DESCRIBE YOUR SETTING AND CAN YOU ADD MORE DIALOGUE BETWEEN YOU AND YOUR PARENTS?

=Resolution=

The next day Sam and I went to check on Jack to see if he was ok. The wind felt like a huge fan trying to blow us away. Sam's mom took us over to his two story brown house. When we pulled up to his newly flattened driveway both of us got out and rang the door bell. We were nervous because we didn't know what he would do. "Ring, Ring, Ring", went the screaching sound of the door bell. We herd loud footsteps. The big white door opened. We saw Jacks face and then the door closed. "Go away" His vioce was as sad as a low and slow playing violin. "No, not until you grow up." "You have to get over it, Sam won and there's nothing you can do about that know." The door opened a little bit so we could see part of Jacks face. "I really wanted to go", Jack said sadly. "We know that, and we'll make it up to you". "No, thats allright." he said. "Your right, I have been acted dum." "I'm sorry." "So we are back to being friends", I asked "Yes", Jack said. "So we won't act like this if someone looses a game, right" I asked. 'No, we won't" Jack answered.

WHAT WAS THE WEATHER IF IT WAS WINDY? WHAT MADE YOU AND SAM GO CHECK ON JACK? WHERE IS YOUR THEME? YOUR THEME FROM "BELLE PRATER'S BOY" NEEDS TO BE PUT INTO THIS SECTION. IN ADDITION, DESCRIBE THE SETTING AND ADD MORE DESCRIPTIVE DETAILS.