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=Exposition/Inciting Incident= The day began like a normal school day waking up, eating, and leaving for school, but it wasn't because I was leaving strait to the airport after school. When we got there we saw so many people in there that it was as loud as a firework going off over and over again. Then we had to get our boarding tickets. All we could hear was yelling and complaining. All we could see was people and a few chairs.

"Hey kids get back here!" hollered mom. "Yea! Listen to your mom kids." said my grandfather.

My brother and I got so bored in the line we would rather die. Then we ended up on the other side of the room thinking of some thing to do. Even though I was board I was still excited to be going to Disney World for the first time. When we were waiting my brother and I were arguing about who gets the seat next to the window.

DESCRIBE THE ROUTINE OF WAKING UP AND GETTING READY FOR SCHOOL. WHAT IS A SCHOOL DAY LIKE? WERE YOU EXCITED? WHAT SEASON/YEAR IS IT? WHAT DID YOU AND YOUR BROTHER THINK OF DOING? WHAT WERE YOU HOPING FOR AT DISNEY? DESCRIPTIVE DETAILS.

=Rising Action= When we finally got on the plane and it took off I was already busy looking out the window and watching the movie. The plane was a nice sized plane and quiet. There wasn't much to do except listen to the radio, watch the movie, and look out the window. The ride got so boring after a while I thought I was hearing the seat telling me to sleep for a while.

"Facet your seat belts," Whistled the plane's speakers, "Where about to land."

Then I woke up and was happy to see we finally got there I noticed it took about 3-4 hours to get to the airport.

DESCRIBE THE PLANE. WHAT DID YOU THINK ABOUT DURING THE FLIGHT? WHO DID YOU TALK TO? ADD DIALOGUE; NONE IS PRESENT HERE. DESCRIPTIVE DETAILS. YOUR RISING ACTION IS MADE UP OF 3 MINI PLOTS? I AM NOT SURE YOU HAVE THEM HERE.

=Climax= After a long flight my family finally got to the airport in Florida near Disney World. We then had to get some papers filled out and our luggage out of the plane and onto a big bus where we had to wait another hour or so. I knew that we were going to be in a nice hotel room. "It's about time we got here," I whimpered. "Man that was long," said my brother. Finally after a long day we actually got to Disney Land. By the time we got into our spacious room it was almost midnight. Now before doing anything we had gone to sleep and it really was a long day. We were staying in a quiet room for the next week and fool around in with things we would buy.

WHAT DID THE AIRPORT LOOK LIKE? DESCRIBE THE WEATHER. WHY WERE YOU WAITING FORA BUS? REMEMBER THIS IS THE HIGHEST POINT OF YOUR STORY; WHERE ALL THE ACTION TAKES PLACE; IS THAT PRESENT HERE?

=Falling Action=

By now my family has finally gotten to our hotel room and gotten up from bed the next day. The first thing we did was look around the hotel my brother and I were happy to find an arcade room and started begging our mom if we could have some money to play, but we were not authorized to play yet because it was 11:00 and there was no time. Then we went to the pool and my brother was complaining about it being too cold for him, but it was nice and warm for everyone else since I immersed my self right away. After being in the pool for at least an hour we had to leave instead of dawdling because my brother got inflammatory about staying there too long and then we left for lunch. Then as quick as that the day was over and we were getting ready for bed. The next day we went to Epcot in the morning and in the evening we went to magic kingdom. Epcot was a whole lot of fun, there was one amazing ride we went on at least 4-5 times it went over the different things people have done that is important to the present time there was a lot of computer graphics involved. Magic Kingdom was really cool because it was like a small city with one huge castle where we got to watch a show with all the Disney characters it was really cool but got boring towards the end. The absolute best thing there would have to be the fireworks at the end while we were eating dinner. The place we ate at wasn't the best for kids it was more for adults. Bang, Bang, Bang went the arcade games fake pistols. "Come on time to go kids its time to go back to our room," hollered mom. "Wait we have to finish mom!" my brother and I yelled. "Ok we're done coming,” we said. Just like that the day was over and every thing wanted was done.

WHAT DID THE ARCADE ROOM LOOK LIKE? DESCRIPTIVE DETAILS.... DESCRIBE WHAT YOU FELT DURING YOUR VISIT TO ALL OF THESE PLACES.

=Resolution= Then it was the end of vacation. The last place we went to was Universal Studios where we watched an Indiana Jones reenactment. Then we had to get onto another bus but it was much worse than beforeand had a cool looking section under it that held our luggage it was also very loud because of the people talking. By the time we got to the airport we had to wait till 11:00pm just to get on the plane. When we got home where the heart is it was 5:00am. So we got the next day off to sleepbecause we were as sleepy as an owl durring the day and rest even though it was a school day. That is what I did over the vacation in Florid and it was so much fun.

HOW DOES THIS STORY PARALLEL A THEME FROM "BELLE PRATER'S BOY?" YOUR THEME IS MISSING. DESCRIPTIVE DETAILS... ERIC, PLEASE THNK ABOUT REVISING YOUR STORY; WHAT IS THE PARALLEL? WHAT IS THE PROBLEM IN THE STORY? HOW IS IT SOLVED?